The video is great cinematicly and editorially speaking. I like you and you deserve my respect so Ill give you my oppinion which is like an asshole that everyone has right?.
The lead singers energy is not high enough for the song in many of the clips. She needs to go back, reshoot and kick it up a notch. Its a good piece of work in essence and if you are going pro this video can help you get there. IF that performance is changed. I mean look at her energy in the live performance. They need to match the non live scenes to be convincing or the whole piece is effected and let down. I hope this helps. Im only saying all this because I know you can make this video into a good video.